Ah, man, I find it so strange that something so different from my childhood is still so relatable. I think it's the world building that makes the actions belivable, and this belief in the world makes the escalating actions have so much more impact.
It feels like Dean's life will be fully formed by the end of the story, not just a character but a person.
Grim. Excellent voice and pacing, per usual. Not knowing where this comes in the story, it's hard to know much about the plot. If these are early pages, I'd encourage more set up for the main story arc and what the stakes are or will be. Good to see a new post from you!
This happens every day in real life except in this story the young boy has the compassion to know that he must do something nice. Sad that children have to see things like this hopefully one can learn from this deteriorating society. Excellent read.
More and more I find Fuck It is the way to go.
Ah, man, I find it so strange that something so different from my childhood is still so relatable. I think it's the world building that makes the actions belivable, and this belief in the world makes the escalating actions have so much more impact.
It feels like Dean's life will be fully formed by the end of the story, not just a character but a person.
Top work, mate.
Wow, Kris, Iām speechless. This is so moving.
Grim. Excellent voice and pacing, per usual. Not knowing where this comes in the story, it's hard to know much about the plot. If these are early pages, I'd encourage more set up for the main story arc and what the stakes are or will be. Good to see a new post from you!
This happens every day in real life except in this story the young boy has the compassion to know that he must do something nice. Sad that children have to see things like this hopefully one can learn from this deteriorating society. Excellent read.